Start with a Line from Someone Else (Part 4): Poetry Day 5

“Look in the dictionary to find different nouns and adjectives beginning with the same letters as the words in someone else’s line. “A sudden blow, the great wings beating still” could become, “A sick, bell, the guttural whisper banging sadly.” You may need to go through a few substitutions before you hit on one that excites you and feels like a starting point.”

-Kim Addonizio “Ordinary Genius”

Original Line: “Lost in the darkness; silence surrounds you”

My revisions:

Leading in the deafness; sleeplessness skirts youth

Last in the depiction; soul-searching sells yarn

Original Line: “Thou ill-formed offspring of my feeble brain.”

My revisions:

Transmissible, iridescent opposition of my faultless bliss.

And the poem:

Turkish, intellectual occupier of my flailing book

He’s perfect except there’s nothing

To write about

No flaws, sins or otherwise

A dream

But my novel falls flat

No one wants their one true love

Seen across the rom

Love without words

Doesn’t happen

so the Turk sits

Unpublished

Dusty and alone

Turkish, intellectual occupier of my flailing book.

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