I Don’t Know About This

“Words often contain other words, or can be disassembled in interesting ways. Look at what E.E. Cummings does in “spoke joe to jack,” about an argument over a girl named alice:

   jack spoke to joe

  ‘s left crashed

  pal dropped

Simply by moving the possessive ‘s, Cummings conveys the sudden movement from a verbal argument to a physical fight. Try breaking apart some words for meaningful effect.”

-Kim Addonizio, “Ordinary Genius”

 

I may have broken apart my lines a little too much. Leave a comment and let me know what works and what doesn’t.

 

 

New World Symphony

Let goose

bumps

rise on the back of your neck

Terror shiv

er down your spine

The crash of cymbals

Tremolo of strings

Listen to the sound

of fear

 

Trumpets wail

                      ing

                           at the death of babes

caught sleeping in the storm

Tim

pa

ni

pounds

the march

ing feet

People’s Lib Army

hunting

People

 

The whisper of unwanted children to unwanted mothers

Soft melody hiding in their voices

The beat

kept

by sway

ing

hips

of pro

sti

tutes

strip

pers

and child

 

The fermata

 

 

 

Over rest

 

 

 

of Americans in bed

unafraid

unscarred

opinionated

 

directing

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